More Rewriting

It's funny, but I swear I've taken out more than I've added to The Circle of Confusion. I've re-written chapter one like four times now. But, I want it to be a really great chapter that captures the reader and makes them want to keep reading. Here's the current first three paragraphs of the story. What do you think?

I watched Carrie Davenport approach the plate pulling her blond ponytail tighter. She tapped the plate with her bat, and then turned to me expectantly, blue eyes blazing. I bent forward, the softball behind my back. Our catcher, Leshana Jackson gave me the signal to go a little high with the pitch. I knew she was right. Carrie had a weakness for the high pitches.

Winding up my pitch, I let the ball go with extra speed. As Leshana and I expected, Carrie swung and missed the high pitch. Carrie glared at me. I guess she thought I’d go easy on her after last night, but she should have known better.

Striking Carrie out ended the last round of games with Murray State. It also marked the first shut out of my college pitching career. Carrie threw down her bat and stomped back to her dug out. Leshana and the rest of my team rushed out to hug me.

NaNoWriMo!

National Novel Writing Month started November 1st and I started working on The Circle of Confusion the sequel to Suddenly again. I had written over 30,000 words of it during the summer NaNoWriMo camp and I am hoping to get another 50,000 done during this month.

I am interviewing a student success advisor at WKU who deals with student athletes. So I'm really excited about that. I plan to start posting tidbits here again as the story starts moving forward so please stop by often. :)